The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/08
Nice story, focusing on one of my very favorites. Thanks!
10/13/08
By far my favorite story so far this week. Easy to read, yet packed with meaning.

To really get nit-picky (I always like to offer something constructive) I would challenge you to eliminate some of the "to be" verbs at the beginning. A couple of active verbs will break that up.

Very enjoyable. Nicely written.
The characterization of Bro. Earl was vivid. And I enjoyed the idea of sharing the message in carols. Great writing on the topic.
10/15/08
I was completely engaged, especially once Brother Earl started talking. What a wonderful way to share an amazing hymn. Thank you, George. Glad you're back, my friend.
Your beautiful story caused my heart to rise in worship. So much truth was presented in an interesting way. I'll look at this carol with new eyes when I sing it this year. Thanks, dear Friend.
Lovely story. I remember an older gentleman in my church who suffered a disease that affected his ability to speak aloud. His raspy voice would become so clear when Holy spirit began flowing through him. Earl reminds me of Donny our beloved friend.

I did notice a couple things; one in punctuation and the other spelling.

1."morns"-is this as in morning or in sadness (mourns)?

2.a quotation at the beginning of each new paragraph showing Earl is still talking, then a quotation at the end of the final paragraph.

This is such a beautiful story, I hate saying anything.
George, this was wonderful and I loved the title. If only we all had Earl's heart. That carol is one of my two most favourites. Bless you.