The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/08
Nice story, focusing on one of my very favorites. Thanks!
10/13/08
By far my favorite story so far this week. Easy to read, yet packed with meaning.

To really get nit-picky (I always like to offer something constructive) I would challenge you to eliminate some of the "to be" verbs at the beginning. A couple of active verbs will break that up.

Very enjoyable. Nicely written.
10/15/08
The characterization of Bro. Earl was vivid. And I enjoyed the idea of sharing the message in carols. Great writing on the topic.
10/15/08
I was completely engaged, especially once Brother Earl started talking. What a wonderful way to share an amazing hymn. Thank you, George. Glad you're back, my friend.
10/15/08
Your beautiful story caused my heart to rise in worship. So much truth was presented in an interesting way. I'll look at this carol with new eyes when I sing it this year. Thanks, dear Friend.
10/15/08
Lovely story. I remember an older gentleman in my church who suffered a disease that affected his ability to speak aloud. His raspy voice would become so clear when Holy spirit began flowing through him. Earl reminds me of Donny our beloved friend.

I did notice a couple things; one in punctuation and the other spelling.

1."morns"-is this as in morning or in sadness (mourns)?

2.a quotation at the beginning of each new paragraph showing Earl is still talking, then a quotation at the end of the final paragraph.

This is such a beautiful story, I hate saying anything.
10/16/08
George, this was wonderful and I loved the title. If only we all had Earl's heart. That carol is one of my two most favourites. Bless you.