The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/08
I enjoyed this tender and timely tale.
10/10/08
What a beautiful story - and a good message. Enjoyed reading this one!
10/11/08
My favorite little detail is Tina's smiling mother in the audience. Nicely done.
10/13/08
Very nicely written. Easy to read and follow.

There was one line that jumped out - ...Tina was to prove. The passive voice kind of broke up the paragraph. The active "Tina proved" might help keep it moving.

Overall very well-written. I enjoyed both the humor and sincerity of it.
10/16/08
I really enjoyed this. You earned third place, congrats!
10/16/08
What a sweet story! A humbling, very well written, message to us all. Congratulations on first place. God Bless.
10/16/08
Congrats on 3rd place overall in this masterfully written story!
10/16/08
What a touching story! Thanks for sharing it, and congratulations on your EC!
10/20/08
Loved this story of compassion and friendship. Especially liked the part where the MC wore her brothers pants to school. Also loved that Tina laughed at her doing so. Thumbs up on this one--congrats on your win.