The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/08
I like your wry narrator, and the tone of this quirky little romance.

Not sure about the title--it's not nearly as distinctive as the voice of the rest of the piece.

This is definitely one of my favorites on this level.
10/13/08
Nice story. I like the layers.

It does drift back and forth from past to present tense. A quick check for -ed words can help you stay in a time zone.

Very enjoyable read. Nicely done.