The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/08
Nice job with the mood and the atmosphere here.

I was confused for several paragraphs, as many things seemed to be happening that I wasn't clear on. I had to read it twice to figure it all out. And I'm not clear on why you gave it the title you did.

Your two main characters are very well-written and sympathetic.