The Official Writing Challenge
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Great dialogue! I liked the ending, a kind of a "Twilight Zone" fade to black.
Great descriptive writing and enjoyed the unexpected ending.
09/21/08
Very nice, well written piece. I like the unexpected ending!
09/21/08
This is very sad but I'm sure a conversation that is heard many many times. Nice writing and cool twist at the end.
09/21/08
Love, love, love, love LOVE the ending! Great story!
Great ending--great message.
09/22/08
Nice surprise ending! Reminded me of a Twilight Zone I once saw years ago. Good dialogue between the husband and wife. Good Job!
09/24/08
I really like the twist at the end. I can see the story going on and on like that...great job!
Love the dialogue, and the picture you painted of the kids in back.
Wow. We both took a similar approach to our stories this week, but yours has a lot of deep spiritual meaning that mine lacks. Great job with this!