The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, this was good. I loved the middle section, where he kept ignoring the questions.

The only suggestion (and it's a very minor one) is to get rid of the part about how she found out about the retreat. The fact that she wants to go is enough information for the reader. The someone complicated explanation takes away a bit. But not too much. :)

Very good points you make here. Keep up the great work.
Works need the right motive. Well told story. Good lessons here. Nicely done.