The Official Writing Challenge
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07/11/05
Interesting, the contrasts did not bother me as much as the final sequence. Has some interesting creative possibilities.
07/11/05
A well told story with a thankfully happy ending.
07/13/05
Very original and poetic. I liked it a lot!
07/14/05
You document your character's life and grief very well. End part, where Jake arrives, needs more work to make it as real as the beginning.
07/14/05
I felt in with the beginning, and those things that change peoples lives, but towards the end, it seemed to have lost touch with some descriptive emotion and reality with Jake. Nice article however. littlelight
Interesting love story, leading through various levels of emotion. Reminded me of how sometimes it takes tragedy to bring us to our spiritual senses.....
07/15/05
powerful introspective piece. wow!