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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Snap (09/04/08)

TITLE: Blah-Blah-Blah
By Laury Hubrich
09/10/08


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The bell rang. I settled into my seat to get comfortable for a long forty minutes of Geometry. A nearby chair groaned with dissatisfaction as an overly big student plopped himself down; late, as usual.

“To name a line, any two points on that line can be used,” the teacher began, but soon all I heard was, “blah, blah, blah” and then it turned into a slight murmur and quickly faded to oblivion.

Geometry was replaced by awesome sounds – sounds I’d never noticed before.

Zing zing
Rip tear
Crinkle crackle

of a pen as it is being slid across the rings of a notebook.
of a piece of paper being torn from that binder.
of that paper just before being thrown into the garbage.


Smack pop
Squeak screech
Click clack

of gum as it is annoyingly chomped.
of tennis shoes being dragged across the floor.
of a tongue ring being played with.


Clink clank
Swoosh swoosh
Crack snap

of a piece of hard candy being rolled around in the mouth.
of the dry erase board getting wiped off.
of knuckles being popped.


Clunk bam
Chortles guffaws
Tap tap

of “someone” falling asleep and knocking her head on her desk.
of the students laughing at that “certain someone.”
of high heels as they move to the back of the room.



SNAP!

My head jerks up and I wipe drool from my chin. I am rudely awakened from my lovely place of oblivion. I look up and see my teacher as she looms above me.

SNAP!

She makes that awful sound with her fingers again just because she can and gives me a not so pleasant look. I sit upright in my seat and am suddenly extremely interested in Geometry.


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Beckie Stewart09/11/08
What a cute idea. I like it and the way you presented it as well.
Leah Nichols 09/12/08
I'll have you know that I probably slept in more classes than most of my peers....and still pulled off A's! I'm quite familiar with this situation. The ultimate irony: in nursing class they all laughed at me when I fell asleep for the lecture on sleep disorders!
Yvonne Blake 09/13/08
smile... I love your sounds. I tried to guess them before you explained them.
Joanne Sher 09/14/08
Cute and clever - fun use of the sounds to draw us in. I enjoyed this.
Joy Faire Stewart09/14/08
Great presentation on this fun piece. And the last paragraph is perfect.
Shelley Ledfors 09/14/08
Very creative entry. I love your use of sound descriptions in this!
Jan Ackerson 09/14/08
Very cute, and a fun lesson in onomatopoeia, too!
Celeste Ammirata09/14/08
What a fun entry. Something we can all relate to...great job.
Chely Roach09/14/08
This was a fun little blast from the past! Loved the formatting...extremely well done!
Sharlyn Guthrie09/15/08
Clever formatting. I was in the moment with you all the way through.
Beth LaBuff 09/15/08
Ha... love the "blah, blah, blah" I hear those exact same sounds every day too :) A lot of fun... thanks for taking me to school with you. :)
Kristen Hester09/15/08
Very clever. I loved your awesome descriptions of the different sounds she heard. Fun!
Karlene Jacobsen 09/16/08
Why can't they put more exciting teachers in those classes. They ought to know the majority of us do not get geometry...(lol)

I am amazed how many different angles there are to one little four-letter word.

I love your creativity.
LauraLee Shaw09/17/08
LOVE it, from title to end. How creative and well-written!
Kristi Peifer09/17/08
Loved it! I can relate--right down to the drool!
Joshua Janoski09/17/08
I loved the different sounds. This was obviously written by someone with experience in a classroom, because the noises were all so authentic. :)