The Official Writing Challenge
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09/12/08
LOL! Great job - totally pulled me into the story....some tense moments there!
09/13/08
The last line didn't quite jive, but the rest was super in my books. Well done.
09/13/08
Love the banter - great characterization with just the dialog (not easy to do - I know!). I wasn't crazy about the last line, but the rest was great.
Very good suspense. It had me on the edge of my seat waiting for the next bit of dialogue.
09/14/08
Oh my, I laughed and laughed about the "my ears are bleeding" line after hearing Kum By Yah. I SO agree--that song should be banned permanently from the earth.

Funny, funny piece. Maybe a bit of a fizzle toward the end, but a really cute skit--I enjoyed it a lot.
09/14/08
Shiver... I don't like elevators, and now I hope I never hear one SNAP!
09/15/08
I enjoyed the suspense, but I have to agree with some of the others regarding the last line. I was looking for something more. Otherwise it was a nice skit.
Very cute. This was a fun, easy read. I really enjoyed it and could picture the whole thing.
I could see this all playing out. It works well as a skit. Nice job.
This was awesome! It was like a movie playing in my head as I read.