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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Snap (09/04/08)

TITLE: In a Split Second....


It happened in a split second. One minute Julie was a normal twenty-two year old woman, with a wonderful future ahead of her and the next minute she was a disfigured and emotionally crippled woman; all the result of a mean-tempered, vengeful man named, Jeff Logan.

It happened not long ago, around the first of August. Julie was in a local coffee shop, Ann’s Coffees and Cakes, and was sipping some coffee and reading a local paper. She always did this right before going to work at Anotonio’s Beauty Shop, where she worked as a hair stylist. She loved the work and looked forward to making other women look lovely; it was something she began as a little girl; always fixing her friends and neighbor’s hair; often with good results.

But, I digress. Julie was having her morning cup of coffee and looking forward to the day’s work and then as she looked up from her paper, she saw Jeff Logan walk in. A former boyfriend and lover, she and Jeff had been seeing each other for over a year. But, that all changed when they had an argument over money. Jeff wanted Julie to pay for some work done on his Jag and Julie said no. Well, that ended the relationship and left Jeff mad.

It seemed that Jeff had become obsessed with Julie and getting money from her; so he hounded her every chance he got.

He walked toward her, carrying a large sack. Julie’s anger at seeing him, soon turned to fear, as she saw him lift a large jar of fluid from the sack. Before she could get away or defend herself, he quickly opened the lid to the jar and threw it hurriedly toward her face. She began screaming in agony, realizing that the liquid was acid; acid that was quickly burning and destroy her face.

Jeff began laughing manically and just as quickly, ran from the store. Julie couldn’t stop screaming and the pain escalated to heights she couldn’t believe. She fell to the floor, the pain so immobilizing…

She ended up in a hospital that had a wonderful Emergency Burn Unit. It took several years and many operations before she was back to anything resembling normal. She lost her job at Antonio’s Beauty Shop but about a year after the horrible incident, she found work as a hairdresser at Marge’s Beauty Salon. Marge was a terrific and understanding woman and Julie was ending her first year there and finally getting back to a normal routine and making new friends.

Jeff was never heard of again. It was rumored that he left the country and was living somewhere in Europe.

But, Jeff made himself known every now and then by calling Julie and then just listening to her, “Hello, who is this? Jeff is this you?” He loved listening to her anxious voice. Just knowing that she still feared him, filled him with joy.

It was a crisp November day and Julie had a full day at Marge’s Beauty Salon ahead of her. She had just walked inside the salon when she noticed something odd.

Marge was usually there enjoying a smoke, but she was nowhere to be found.

“Marge, are you here? Thought I’d come in early and get things set up…”

It was fate that put Julie within reach of a large bottle of hair dye; for in the corner just several feet away from her, was Jeff-- this time with a knife!

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Sunny Loomis 09/11/08
Tense story. Good descriptions. The ending sort of left me hanging.
Patricia Turner09/11/08
I did get a little confused on the timing of the story between:

It happened not long ago...


It took several years and many operations...

Nevertheless a tense and well written story that left me hanging too.