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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Snap (09/04/08)

TITLE: Cereal Killer
By Lynda Schultz
09/07/08


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Hither, thither, up and down,
Across the factory floor,
“Where is that boy, what has he done?”
Yelled Crackle with a roar.

“We can’t proceed, there is no chance,
Everything’s too quiet.
Production’s stopped, no means to find
A place in human diet.”

Pop was annoyed; there was no doubt—
Perhaps a bit afraid.
Some evil could have entered here
And made a nasty raid—

To steal a third of Krispies' fame
And hide it in a dungeon
A ransom ask, or worse to come,
To kill the sweet curmudgeon.

‘Tis true Snap’s temper was quite short,
But that should not require
A punishment as foul as death
A fate that is so dire.

Crackle paced and Pop thought hard.
The problem was confusing
A dozen reasons came and went
Each one set him to musing.

“Perhaps he fell into his bowl
And drowned in low-fat milk.
We need to go and see if he
Needs help from his own ilk.”

While empty boxes stood in rows,
Crackle’s ire grew.
No work was done, no food produced,
He knew just what he’d do:

“I’ll break his neck when next I see
My misbegotten brother.
If he’s not dead, or locked away,
Send running to his mother.”

Pop grew tall and spoke his mind:
“You speak in such a fury
Your words are harsh, but so untrue,
I hope that it’s just worry.”

The factory door swung open wide
A gasp was heard from all
As onto factory floor walked in
The cause of Crackle’s gall.

“So sorry, guys, I overslept.
I hope that you’ll decide
To overlook this lapse of mine.”
On grace, Snap now relied.

Pop was relieved there hadn’t been
A death, or something other
But Crackle wasn’t so inclined
To pardon his dear brother.

“Have you no sense of what is right?
You could have used your cell
To tell us that you were delayed,
That all was right and well.”

True to form, Snap’s fuse was short
No one could deny it
Both brothers took to fisticuffs
Thus ending all the quiet.

The rice got puffed, the boxes trembled,
Waxed paper tumbled ‘round,
As brothers fought to a dead heat;
Not ceding any ground.

Pop was forced to intervene
His veins about to shatter
With face so red from such disgrace
And nerves about to tatter.

“All this fuss, and useless muss,
‘Cuz Snap was late for work
I must take charge, as fathers should,
My duty not to shirk.”

“Please understand that what you do
Has many repercussions.
The children want ‘Snap,’ ‘Crackle,’ ‘Pop,’
Not rice with head concussions.”

“The sound they hear should happy be
Not of war, but peace.
So let’s forgive and move along
Production to increase.”

The lessons learned from Krispie sounds
Within our hearts should lurk:
Think the best, control your ire—
And don’t be late for work.


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Deborah Engle 09/11/08
Fun! Great job!
Joanne Sher 09/11/08
Delightful and fun - that last stanza is great, and I absolutely ADORE the title. Great stuff. Betcha you had a blast writing this one.
Charla Diehl 09/11/08
From the title I knew this would be about Rice Krispies--and what a fun and creative poem this was to read. Great imagination here and I'm sure you enjoyed writing it as much as I did reading it.
Leah Nichols 09/12/08
Very creative! Great job and clever poem. :)
Joy Faire Stewart09/14/08
This was so much fun, I have to read it a second time aloud. Great job!
Scott Sheets09/15/08
This was a wonderful, fun, engaging poem. I loved the poetic telling of Krispie Klan. Great writing!
Sharlyn Guthrie09/15/08
Your personifications are loads of fun, and the rhyme and rhythm just right.
Shelley Ledfors 09/15/08
What fun! I enjoyed every word, and LOVE the title!
Beth LaBuff 09/15/08
I love you use of "sweet curmudgeon!" And then when Crackle had "overslept," "the rice got puffed" and "Pop was forced to intervene" LOL! There's so much to laugh at and love about this! Your title is absolutely GREAT!
Kristen Hester09/15/08
So, so, so very clever. There's much to love about this poem. It's a great read and very fun! BRAVO!
Anne Linington09/17/08
This is a great play on the popular cereal, and many lessons on anger, forgiveness, responsibility, all packaged in an easily digested form.