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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Truth or Dare (08/28/08)

TITLE: Where Are Ravens When You Need Them?
By Sharlyn Guthrie


“Would someone tell me how I ended up on this ledge?” I wondered out loud.

“You climbed.” Ordinarily Dan was a likable teenager, but at that moment I wanted to smack him. We had too many witnesses, however. The ledge we were sharing jutted out forty feet above the lake where the rest of the youth group and the other chaperones sat staring up at us from their canoes. One look over the ledge, and I headed back the way we came.

“The only way off is to jump,” my companion said matter-of-factly. “I’ll go first.” Again I quelled a violent outburst, but I did manage a death grip on his arm.

“No! Not yet, I mean. Just let me figure this out.” He was right about the path we had taken to the top. We had climbed hand-over-hand, pulling ourselves up and over rocks. I’d broken two fingernails coming up. I could easily break my neck attempting to go down.

I tried to think of someone to blame for my predicament, and settled on my adventuresome, risk-taking husband, who was responsible for dragging me along on this trip in the first place –the one who had said, as compellingly as the serpent himself, “I dare you.” It had already been pointed out that Dan, Gilbert, and I were the last remaining holdouts, and Dan was already making his way to the top. That left me in the same category as Gilbert, a constant shirker of responsibility, feigner of injuries, and genuine pain in the posterior region. If that weren’t enough, my entire family had already successfully leaped off the cliff.

“Hold up, Dan!” I’d called out, oblivious to the shocked expressions exchanged by the others.

It can’t be that bad. Who cares that I’m the oldest female in the group? Besides, I’ll make my sons and my husband proud. Everyone will respect me, and news of my strength and courage will spread throughout the church -maybe even the city.

Grandiose thoughts had fueled my ascent. Now, with Dan’s arm turning blue beneath my fingers, I considered the alternatives.

Jumping is definitely out of the question. Climbing back down is impossible. Maybe I can convince the others to leave me here and pray for the ravens to feed me like Elijah.

My musings caused me to loosen my grip just enough that Dan wriggled away. “See ya at the bottom, Mrs. Larson. Good luck.” And with that, Dan ran and leapt off the cliff. I couldn’t bear to watch, but several seconds later I heard a splash, followed by cheers and applause from below.

I had never been so alone. I searched the sky for ravens and, seeing none, I edged closer to the ledge.

“Jump! Jump! Jump! Jump!”

So this is the respect I get…twenty ungrateful teens heckling me to leap to my death like a jilted lover on a New York skyscraper. I’ll show them. They’ll be sorry when their little wilderness vacation is cut short and they have to figure out how to haul my body back to civilization. Guess I’ll end up in the papers after all, if only in the obituaries.

I sucked in my breath, closed my eyes, and stepped off the ledge…down…down…down. When will I reach the bottom? Down…down…down…better take another breath. Down…down…down…I’m coming, Lord Jesus!

Splat! I felt as though I’d just been spanked –hard! Silence closed in and my lungs felt like they were in a vise as I rose to the surface. I came up gasping, and immediately sank back under the chilly water. This time, several hands grabbed and pulled me up and into a canoe.

“You did it!”

“I can’t believe it!”

“Way to go, Mrs. Larson.”

“Wait till everyone hears about this.”

“My mom would never do what you just did.”

I felt exhilarated and proud and thankful all at the same time.

“See, aren’t you glad you did it?” My husband asked, embracing me.

“I guess so. It was pretty impressive how long it took to reach the water. I actually had time to think! I broke two fingernails, though, and my back end is a little sore.”

“You’ll get over it,” he said, with not one bit of sympathy, and I did.

Later, however, in the privacy of our tent, I dropped my wet shorts and revealed a bruise the size of Texas. He gasped and quickly tried to suppress a grin.

“Go ahead and laugh,” I said. “I dare you.”

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HQ Creston09/04/08
I could just feel that slap of the water, the reality of it all was great. I would have liked one more line about the ravens though but thats just me. great piece thanks for sharring.
Leah Nichols 09/05/08
I loved this one! Great writing....I love the dramatic inner thoughts with a bit of hyperbole.
Joanne Sher 09/06/08
You did a wonderful job, especially, with her thoughts. Sounded so realistic! Nicely done. Love the last line, too.
Glynis Becker09/08/08
I loved this! I'm so scared of heights and water that you had me literally on the edge of my seat waiting for the outcome :) Great writing!
Beth LaBuff 09/08/08
I LOVE your title! …and I can't believe that you jumped ! :) impressive! …ouch to the bruise and I also love your ending dare (pun intended) :) You've got tons of fun (hyperbole intended) in this!
Jan Ackerson 09/09/08
Wonderful, wonderful voice. Love the bits with the ravens--and the awesome hyperbole. Love this entry!
Betty Castleberry09/10/08
This is excellent. It's well written and entertaining, too. Great title. Kudos.
Dee Yoder 09/10/08
Just reading the description of going under the water gave me claustrophobia! No. Way. Not me. Never!
The nice thing about being a reader is wimpy me gets to live vicariously through the characters in the stories! Love the "experience" of jumping off a cliff into deep water that you gave me in this one. ( :
(Please say this is not a first-hand account!)