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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Truth or Dare (08/28/08)

TITLE: The Worst Night EVER
By Sheri Gordon
09/03/08


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Jan. 14 My Birthday!!!!
Dear Diary,

2day is the best day EVER cuz Iím a teenager!!!! Friday is my bday party with my BFF Karly. Her bday is a week after mine and weíre having a slumber party at her house cuz we always have our parties together and I canít wait cuz her mom is so cool.

Jan. 15
Dear Diary,

2day Karly told me her mom is making her invite her cousin Chandra to our party which ruins everything cuz ever since I kissed a boy she liked in 3rd grade sheís hated me. Mom says to not let her ruin my day but she doesnít understand cuz Chandra will ruin the party by just being there. Maybe she wonít come. I hope I hope I hope.

Jan. 17
Dear Diary,

Sorry I didnít write in you yesterday but Karly and I were busy getting ready for our party which is tonight! Yesterday we went to the store with her mom and bought lots of food and decorations and then we made the cake and Karly told me today that Chandra hasnít told her if she is coming so I hope I hope I hope she doesnít come.

Jan. 18
Dear Diary,

Last night should have been the best night EVER cuz it was our slumber party but it was the worst night EVER and Iíll NEVER be able to show my face ANYWHERE again. First we ate pizza and chips and those little tacos I really like then Karlyís mom told us about a game from back in the day called truth or dare. If you pick truth you have to answer a question with the truth but if you donít want to answer the question then you pick dare and you have to do something daring like eat a pickle with chocolate and whipped cream. Well stupid Chandra asked me if I like Christopher Zimmers which I sort of do but I sort of donít but I didnít want to answer cuz I knew my face would get bright red if I lied so I picked dare. Then Chandra told me to run outside in my pajamas and yell ďI think Ryan Lithers is cuteĒ 3 times which everyone thinks heís cute so saying it out loud is no biggie and heís a junior so itís not like I would ever see him anyway. Except I sometimes see him at church but he doesnít even know Iím alive and besides he was playing in a basketball game that night and itís not like heíd be driving by Karlyís house anyway. So everyone went outside in our pajamas and I yelled ďI think Ryan Lithers is cuteĒ but Chandra told me I had to say it 3 times so then I started yelling again but the sprinklers came on and I saw a car coming so I ran for the house but tripped over a hose and fell into some bushes. My so called friends ran inside when they saw the car coming so nobody was there to help me get out of the bushes and I kept falling back in cuz my ankle and arm hurt and the bushes had some stickery things on them but then someone grabbed my arms and lifted me out. And guess who it was????? I just wanted to die!!!!! It was Ryan Lithers!!!!! He said they were driving home from the basketball game and they were dropping off Matthew Goshing who lives on the corner on Karlyís street and who is also very cute. Ryan didnít say that Matthew is very cute, I said that. Except I didnít really say it out loud I just thought it. Ryan said that they heard someone yelling and then they saw me running and tripping and falling into the bushes so they thought they should stop to see if I was okay. I just stood there and stared at him and then ran inside the house where everyone was laughing at me even my BFF Karly who is no longer my BFF. So now my mom wants to know why I wonít go to church when Iíve always loved to go to church and she keeps asking what happened between Karly and me and where I got all these scrapes and I donít want to tell her cuz sheíd never understand. I wonder if she ever played that lame game truth or dare. Probably not cuz my mom is so not cool.


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Joanne Sher 09/05/08
That certainly would be embarrassing for a teen. Thanks for sharing.
Deborah Engle 09/05/08
This was a fun read, but I'm glad it wasn't about me! Growing up is hard, isn't it?
Kristen Hester09/05/08
The voice in this entry is very authentic. She tells teh story just as I assume a teen would tell it. Good job.
Betty Castleberry09/06/08
I really felt like I was snooping in a teen's diary. This was a fun read. Kudos.
Shirley McClay 09/08/08
Ohhhh... so painfully embarrassing. I liked that you had all of the diary entry in one big paragraph... thats how I always wrote when I was a teen.
Sharlyn Guthrie09/08/08
You had the young teen voice, the tone, the abbreviations, the form...everything! Loved the last line, too.
Carole Robishaw 09/08/08
Very good, almost too good, I think you've had ample experience in this area ROFL

Good job, I laughed all the way, especially at the run on jumble of the last paragraph.
Beth LaBuff 09/08/08
I enjoyed your "super big" paragraph too...and your ending line "cuz my Mom is so not cool" ... that made me smile. :)
Joy Faire Stewart09/10/08
The teen's voice is so authentic, I could feel her "pain." The long paragraph was perfect, just as a teen would do. Excellent job with the topic.
Catrina Bradley 09/10/08
Ok, I still write like this when it's just for my "diary" cuz no one else will ever see it and I just write what I'm thinking however I want to cuz I don't care about sentences & stuff.

I love love love it! :)
LauraLee Shaw09/11/08
This is extremely good. Great for the topic and entertaining at the same time.