The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 994 times
Member Comments
Great start for a much longer piece. The late introduction of the second character adds a dimension to the story that may need explaining in more detail. Good job. Thanks for posting.
A well told story -thanks for sharing :)
Very touching. Well done.
Heartbreaking and healing. Good job!
You establish a sense of place really well and draw me into the lives of characters about whom I want to know more. Well done.
I love the subtle, hopeful message and it was a good build.I think the problem of introducing the other character too late in the story could be solved easily by a thought I wonder if anyone else ever comes here? I thought that it was great.
Wow! This is powerful. Great message. I'm still wiping the tears away. Thanks.
Very nicely written. I liked the man who appeared at the end. Right fitting end to the story. God bless, littlelight
"But it's here. Even when you can't see it." Very Well done! Most enjoyable.
Powerful imagery and emotion. Sweeps you up and away with mounting tension.
I've said it before: you have this amazing way of drawing the reader in from the very first sentence, immersing him in the story with excellent imagergy and description. Wonderful underlying message. I think Deb was right - you've struck the perfect balance this week. Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
Ya done good, this has a nice ring of hope to it. Thought the imagry of Christ was a perfect backdrop!
As with all the previous work you've done, I loved this. A++!