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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Truth or Dare (08/28/08)

TITLE: Buzz
By Betty Castleberry
08/29/08


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The summer night was still and damp
Perfect for relaxing
On the porch or in the yard
All other moves were taxing

Two winged critters flittered ‘round
One said to her sidekick
“Take my dare and follow me
I’ll show what we’ll pick.”

“No one will know that I’m about
But you can’t do the same
I can feast and fly away
Its really all a game.”

“Our victim will not feel my sting
But he’ll be aware of yours
For I can bite him stealthily
I’ll nail his tasty pores.”

A hairy arm their landing field
The human unaware
That he would soon become a feast
Of skeeters on a dare

The first bite was a gentle zap
Her presence was unknown
The stage was set for number two
The next gal picked her zone

She zoomed in on juicy flesh
Phlebotomy in motion
When smack of hand came crashing down
And stopped her spunky notion

With dying breath she spoke aloud
“My pride got in the way
My repast was a deadly one
I’m allergic to type A.”


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Lynda Schultz 09/04/08
Cute! Like bombing runs—it's the second plane that takes the flak—the victims having been awakened by the first plane. Very good.
Pat Guy 09/04/08
Quite a few goodies in this one. Internal rhyme, alliteration, imagery ... of which "Phlebotomy in motion" is my favorite. ;) Great example of Anthropomorphism which doesn't take down the reader but happens to be a really fun read. ;) *chuckle, chuckle*
Joanne Sher 09/05/08
I laughed aloud at the end of this - as well as a few places in the middle. Great language and meter, and delightful.
Laury Hubrich 09/06/08
Oh my! I love your last line! What a perfect ending for such nasty little creatures! LOL!
Shirley McClay 09/08/08
Living in Winnipeg I LOATHE mosquitoes! Kill em all!!!

Great story and I have NO sympathy whatsoever for the little bloodsuckers.
Jan Ackerson 09/08/08
Hilarious--expecially the last two stanzas!
Sharlyn Guthrie09/08/08
I'm glad he got his come-upins! Great rhyme, meter, and humor.
Carole Robishaw 09/08/08
This was fun, good job!
Marlene Austin09/08/08
Never thought of insects daring each other. Very unique. :)
Joy Faire Stewart09/09/08
Love everything about this fun poem and especially the last stanza.
Pamela Kliewer09/09/08
Hahaha - this is funny and a great read. Great take on the topic.
Beth LaBuff 09/11/08
I love "the skeeters on a dare" and I have to laugh at the "phlebotomy in motion". You have some great lines and your ending "I'm allergic to type A"… just puts this over the top. What fun!!