The Official Writing Challenge
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08/29/08
Cute story; I can really feel the mother's frustration mixed with love.

I couldn't put a handle on Lissie's age...sometimes she seemed like a mere toddler, and sometimes quite a bit older.

This story really appeals to the writer in me.
09/01/08
Cute story of a mother's patience. Well told.
09/02/08
Great mother-daughter time story. The dialog is excellent and the descriptions mixed in showed me the action that accompanied it. Awesome job. :) Cat
09/03/08
smile... I love how the author is an author "trying" to tell a "real" story.
You changed Lissie's speech her and there, so it was hard to tell her age.
Well done
09/03/08
This was fun, I really liked it. My 8 year old granddaughter still gets word mixed up, sometimes on porpoise!
I liked the dialogue between mother and daughter. I felt the frustration building up as the mother tried to get the bedtime story told and kept getting interrupted. I too got a bit confused as to what the exact age of the girl was. I was assuming around 4 or 5 years old.

This was a fun read, and it was written very well.
09/04/08
Ohhhhh, you know I love this one! Well done, Sara!
09/06/08
Beautiful dialog and story line! This is super creative for the topic!