The Official Writing Challenge
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08/29/08
I can relate to this, as my daughter is currently trying to get pregnant...

Consider this: instead of, for example, saying "I'm so depressed", show us what that feels like, with something like "I feel like my spirit is dragging through mud." Some richer emotional content, in other words.

This will be of great comfort to others in similar cirsumstances.
I enjoyed your story of coming to accept God's will. This progression of desire, anger, acceptance, and answer will resonate with many.
08/29/08
The diary entry format is excellent for this. I liked the progression of her impatience and her honest emotions. The pill part bothered me. I don't understand why she would need the pill if she was still wanting to get pregnant. I understand her deciding not to focus on trying to get pregnant any more (giving the striving part a break), but her use of the pill bothered me here.
Other than that and a few tiny grammar and punctuation issues (I often have these too), I think the piece is an important one that many should read.