The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/08
Full of intrigue and suspense, this was a great piece for the topic. I got a little confused when the name Sheila was introduced, but a second read showed me she was the lady from the paragraph above. What I liked about this story is the unique voice and descriptions, very true to life of skeptics in the church AND the way you showed that we as believers can fall into the trap of being phony. Well done.
08/21/08
Excellent read, almost none of it took me where I thought I was being led. My only small suggestion is the the two women's stories be more nearly equal...the second one was every bit as interesting as the first, and I felt as if she got shortchanged. Very compelling reading.
08/26/08
I liked this entry. We all do it - we look at others and think they have it so much better. Very good job here!
08/28/08
Well thought-out piece! The title is perfect. The irony at the end breaks my heart. Church should be THE PLACE for all who feel lonely, betrayed, and inadequate. You've definitely made an important statement with this story. Congratulations on your placement!!!