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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Charade (08/14/08)

TITLE: My Charade
By T. F. Chezum
08/20/08


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Sitting, laughing with my friends,
Merriment that never ends.
This faÁade canít make amends.

Happiness is my charade.

Visions from my yesteryear,
Acting wild and drinking beer,
Living days so insincere.

Thinking Ďbout the choices made.

Losing life I canít retrieve.
Mourning loss, but cannot grieve,
Emptiness I canít conceive.

Pondering the life Iíve laid.

Sinking fast in my despair.
Burdens far too great to bear,
Reaching out, but no oneís there.

Loneliness, the price Iíve paid.

What Iíve sown, I now must reap,
Languid, not allowed to sleep,
Suffering, I cannot weep.

Pain is caused by this charade.

Growing bitter in my age,
Seeking wisdom from the sage,
Wishing I could turn the page.

Weary from this game Iíve played

Consequences turning dire,
Twisting, tangled in the mire,
Fearing I will face His ire.

I must end this masquerade.

On my search I now embark,
Stumbling, groping in the dark,
Praying, pleading for a spark,

Rescue me from my charade.


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Betsy Markman08/21/08
Very good message and poetic structure!
Catrina Bradley 08/23/08
I love the structure of this poem. Your message will speak to many. Nicely done.
Joanne Sher 08/23/08
The structure is masterful, and the message so important and wonderfully presented. Very well done.
Beth LaBuff 08/24/08
Everything about this is perfect! Your word choices and rhymes are wonderful.
LaNaye Perkins08/25/08
Powerful, poetic, and perfect. Love this message, and I love the structure of the poem. Well done!
Yvonne Blake 08/25/08
Wow! I love you poetic pattern. The message is so sad, but comes across clearly. Well done
Chely Roach08/25/08
This was AWESOME! The message and the flow were spot on...I loved it!
Cheri Hardaway 08/25/08
Poignant and compelling. Praying this seeking one finds the Father... Blessings, Cheri
Sharlyn Guthrie08/25/08
Wonderful, well-written poem. It seems honest and heart-felt, too.
Leah Nichols 08/26/08
I like the poem structure, and the message reads clearly.
Leah Nichols 08/26/08
I like the poem structure, and the message reads clearly.
Joanney Uthe08/26/08
"Happiness is my charade."

Oh,how many of us have lived this line. Great poem.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/26/08
What a sad facade you've pictured in your poem. I like the structure. Very well done.
Betty Castleberry08/26/08
I like this format. You are right on topic, too. Great rhyme. Well done.
Joy Faire Stewart08/26/08
This is my favorite stanza..."Sinking fast in my despair. Burdens far too great to bear, Reaching out, but no one's there." Beautiful job capturing emotions.
LauraLee Shaw08/27/08
This is brilliant. These lines especially stand out:
Loneliness, the price Iíve paid.

What Iíve sown, I now must reap,
Languid, not allowed to sleep,
Suffering, I cannot weep.

Pain is caused by this charade.

Heather Sargent08/27/08
Fantastic! I love this, you have absolutely captured the depth of the sorrow we can feel when we look in the mirror and take off the mask. Well done!
Kate Grey01/01/09
Beatiful. Everything works together in the expression, just as excellent poetry should.