The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/08
Good job. Glad she got away from him!
08/21/08
The repetition is a good tool. You captured me from the beginning and held me right to end. Very good.
08/23/08
Wonderful characterization, and I love the "refrain" throughout - very powerful reminder of what is really going on. Very well done.
08/24/08
This entry is full of hope. Very good:)
08/24/08
I especially liked the paragraph about the ice chips... superior writing displayed in this.
08/25/08
Great title, and great depiction of Hayley's revelation from the Lord. Very satisfying outcome. Nice work. Blessings, Cheri
I like the way you wove the definition of the topic word into the story. Good plot and character development throughout.
08/26/08
Amazing job! Most excellent writing.
I loved your story of God's seeking and forgiveness. You showed His persistence and His love so well. Excellent writing.
Enjoyed this entry and the well executec characterization; It fulfilled the charade theme exactly and could prove thought-provoking to many with unsatisfactory relationships. Congratulations.