The Official Writing Challenge
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08/21/08
Good, enjoyable read, and some very clever rhymes!
08/21/08
Oh, very good. Some priceless lines.
08/22/08
Clever and delightful. This seemed to be fun to write - it certainly was to read. I could picture it all happening. Wonderful.
08/23/08
This is really good! Some of these lines are amazing.

"He borrowed spot remover
From a clean safari guest,
Who’d hoped to spot a spotted cat
While spotless on his quest."

Very creative!
What a fun narrative with so many great plays on words--my favorite--what the old knu knew.
08/27/08
ha, ha, ha...LOVE IT!!! I tried to find a favorite line, but there were about 5 or 6 that I absolutely adored. This one made me laugh out loud:
"Saying “Leopards can’t be monkeys
‘Cause they pay no union dues.”
Great job. I love your poetry, Befffy!
Ha, ha, this was fun!
I especially liked this part:

"And with the union’s statement
That was posted in a hurry,
No hakuna with matata
Made Paka start to worry."

Kudos.
08/27/08
You have my greatest respect! What a poem... what a command of language... Well done! Remarkable. Cheri
08/27/08
Un-honkin-believable. I cannot believe this came out of your head! This was my fav:
The monkeys weren’t bamboozled
By Paka Leopard’s cheating.
They called each head of household to a
Monkey business meeting.


Just perfect.
Excellent writing, my friend! Congratulations on your 1st place EC. Way to go!!
Wow! Way to go Bethy. Good Job.
Congratulation on First Place EC
"Craved a meal that conformed to his High protein – low-carb diet."

I loved that line. Actually, I LOVED the entire thing! So good! Anyone that wants an example of clever poetry done right should read this piece. Congratulations on top honors, Beth!
08/28/08
Congratulations on your 1st place. This is so clever, so creative, so fun, so excellent. Great job with the topic. Wow.
LOL!! Spot remover, what the old gnu knew, Paka Swahili for cat; fun and clever all the way through! Congratulations on you 1st place and 1st place EC!! This SO deserved it.
09/03/08
Beth, This was SUPERB! Congrats on your EC win.. I am never surprised to see your work in the spotlight.. your gift is truly a GIFT to all of us.. keep it up girl.. you inspire me!
BETH..OH BETH...WHAT ARE YOU DOING ...BLESSING YOUR READERS SO MUCH! PRAISE GOD!

YOUR POETIC LANGUAGE FLOWS LKE A ROYAL ROBE OF PURPLE SATIN..SO...SO FLAWLESS!

I AM GREATLY BLESSED...I LOVE THIS "PAKA HAD A REVELATION, MY SPOTS ARE SO CLICHE".

THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT LIFE IS ALL ABOUT TO SOME PLOTTERS...

"LORD! THANK YOU FOR BLESSED BETH...PLEASE FILL HER MORE AND MORE...THAT THRU HER....I TOO WOULD LEARN MORE...AMEN"
07/05/09
Just read this for the first time,along with "Forgive Her Trespasses," and I am amazed at your writing! Congratulations at having two entries in the top 40 contenders for BOB.
I'm sure either could have won, except the competition is sooooo great on FW. Thanks for your wonderful poems,