The Official Writing Challenge
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Yikes--good one!
Wow - I didn't see that twist coming! I thought Jared was a Christian at the start. A good lesson - We need to help those in need, before someone else with not so good intentions gets there first!
Uh oh. This give me an icky feeling as to how easy it is for the evil one to deceive. Some really excellent writing here.
An excellant example of a charade too many fall into. A ? mark after "What did she have to lose" and "Why not", with one spelling error noted (spell check might have pick these up). I really liked the flow and the message.
God blass and keep writing.
Very good story. Jared seemed nice enough during most of the story until the end. Then we see who he really is. Nicely done.