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You set the scene very well. The King in this story reminds me a bit of King Xerxes from the book of Esther. I didn't see the twist at the end coming. Well done!
Well told. Thanks
Enjoyed the read...a charade well "played."
You took us straight into the action with great descriptions and characterization.
Who would ever suspect a clumsy court jester to be a skilled assassin? Great story, well done!
Clever story!

I'd suggest a bit of comma editing, to give your piece a smoother flow.

I really enjoyed this story.
Very good story. Nice descriptions. I like the surprise ending.
A great story - I could see the action so well from your writing. I was wondering where the charade was, and then the ending. Love it!
Very cleverly told. I love the irony of the jester making a fool of the others :)