The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, this is rich! Lots of great humor here--I literally laughed out loud a few times--but an important message, too, and genuine depth. It's free verse, it's parody, it's allusion--so many goodies in one poem! Love it!
Oh, this is fantastic! I'm adding it to my "Favorites," and plan to re-read it quite a few times to enjoy all of its nuances and humor. Not many entries make me laugh aloud like this one. Great job!
This is amazing and a winner in my opinion. Excellent!
I think we might have a placer with this one. Just maybe. :)
ROFL...great stuff here. I giggled through a good part of it, once I realized where this was going. Nice job! ^_^
Awesome! You captured the essence of love as the Lord intended it. The lines, love her as I have loved you, and love him as I have loved you speak volumes of what a marraige should be. When we put our spouse before ourselves, just as the Lord has done for us, an explosion of intimacy happens!

Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us. May it be a blessing to many.
What a beautiful Song of Salvation of a marriage. :-) I hear it speaking to me. Excellent writing!
Well done ... Very well done. Great job.
Hey, Lisa--I'm going to feature this way cool poem in the Front Page Showcase for the week of September 8. Look for it on the FW Home page, and congratulations!
Awesome! I happened to read this just on the heels of finishing Song of Songs, and the timing couldn't be more perfect. I love the line: "Who were those felines feeding you buffalo fowl?" I hope it was meant to be humorous because it made me laugh. I love the end too. Amazing modern day Song. :)
Lisa, I'm ROFL and saying 'Amen!' all at the same time. What a gem you've written! I too am just now reading through Song of Solomon and this poem came at just the right time for me too. I found myself in the Book rolling my eyes and snickering at what translation did to Solomon's 'Song'. Yours is the perfect good natured parody. I'm sure the Lord is getting a kick out of this one too! Great job, dear poet!!
I'm so glad that Jan chose this for the front page this week. I remember it well from the week I was judging. I thought (and still think) it is a masterpiece! I find the humor in it completely appropriate. God surely has a sense of humor too, and I know he provided you with the inspiration.