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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hide and Seek (08/07/08)

TITLE: Desperately Seeking Jasmine
By Lauryn Abbott
08/13/08


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“When are you going out to get it?” asked Dave quietly, looking toward the garage door.

“In a minute. I just want to get everything prepared,” replied Sara. “I’ve got to make sure she doesn’t think something is up.”

“Huh, good luck with that!”

Sara looked around, got her things together and started toward the garage.

“Be quiet,” he reminded her as she walked out the door. A moment later, he heard the door start to open, then a thud with the sound of metal clanking together. He turned his head just in time to see a quick flash. The spot Jasmine had been sleeping was now vacant.

Sara came through the door. By the look on her face, he could tell she knew she was too loud.

“She ran?”

“Yep, I’m telling you, she’s got ESP!”

“Oh no, I’ve got to find her. They’ll kill me if I cancel again.” She groaned knowing this was not going to be easy.

They both walked slowly through the house, calling for Jasmine. When she didn’t appear, they tried bribery. This too failed. After 10 minutes they knew she had defeated them again. Sara walked to the phone, picked it up and dialed.

“Thanks for calling Callie’s Clippers, how can I help you?”

“Uh, hi Callie, this is Sara, and I was supposed to be bringing Jasmine in, but uh…”

“She got away from you again, didn’t she?” Callie was laughing as she said it.

“Yeah, I really thought I could get her this time, but she’s hiding and won’t come out. We even tried bribery with the goodies she loves, but it didn’t work. I’m really sorry.” Sara knew Callie would understand, but still she felt bad for once again taking time out of her schedule.

“Sara, I get it. Trust me, this happens all the time. It’s why I overbook. Sure sometimes everyone makes it when they’re supposed to, but not often. Do you want to set up another appointment? I have time on Friday.”

“I’ll take it. I just have to get her in.”

“Ok, we’re set. I’ve got you down for Friday morning at 8:30AM. And Sara, why don’t you try restraining her first, like putting her in the bathroom until you’re ready to go? That’s what some of my other clients do.”

“Oh, that’s a great idea! Why didn’t I think of that? Thanks again and we’ll see you on Friday.”

“What’s a great idea?” asked Dave

“Callie suggested we put her restrain her first, like put her in the bathroom, then get my stuff together.”

“Mmm, yeah, I think that might work. Where are you going?” Dave asked as she was heading back toward the garage.

“I have to put the carrier back” she said, then stopped abruptly. “Dave, come here, please.”

“What’s up?” he asked, while walking to where she stood.

Sitting there in front of the door to the garage was a very large, very furry, somewhat matted calico cat, with a twitching tail and a mischievous gleam in its eye.

“Do you ever feel like we’re being mocked?” Sara asked, as the laughter began to roll out.


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Joy Faire Stewart08/18/08
Yes, I agree, pets have ESP. I enjoyed this slice of life scene and like the smooth flow of the writing.
Chely Roach08/18/08
LOL...this was a hoot. Dogs going to the groomer/vet--no problem. Cats...another story. Very cute story!
Kristen Hester08/18/08
Very cute. I can relate! We can never find our cats when it's time to go to the vet. Nice job.
Ellen Dodson08/18/08
Good job with dialogue and humor. I'm a pet-lover too and would love to see some reflection/commentary at the end of this amusing anecdote.
Joshua Janoski08/18/08
This reminds me of my late dog Schatzie. When she was a pup, we could not get her to go inside, and I would always be late for school because of it. Finally, we figured out that she didn't like the garden hose, so we just picked it up, and that sent her running into the house very quickly.

Thank you for sharing this story. It brought back a lot of good pet memories to me.
James Dixon08/19/08
A fun story. I remember having to avoid saying v-e-t.
Jean Thornberry08/20/08
I really loved your story! I found myself chuckling at the end when the cat appeared in front of the garage. Now that the appointment was cancelled, she was all set to go! Ha! Also, thanks for surprising us with what Jasmine was. You had me puzzled.

The only suggestion I would make is:

“Callie suggested we put her restrain her first, like put her in the bathroom, then get my stuff together.”

Take out the put her in this line so it reads, "Callie suggested we restrain her first..."

Excellent. Hope you feel better.
Sara Harricharan 08/20/08
ROFL! What a fun-filled read! Yep, I do agree, I think those royal little kitties have some sort of ESP! Such fun, I loved the ending. ^_^