The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/08
I absolutely adore this family and all the love that is there. Great job!
08/14/08
Nice, homey story. It is a bit like one I almost entered in the challenge for this week, but decided against it. This is a precious story. I enjoyed it...Helen
08/15/08
What a wonderful picture of a father's love.
08/15/08
What a lovely story. Were these meant to be the apostles Peter and Andrew as children? The characterization of Peter seemed right on :)
Very nicely done.
08/16/08
Those last two lines tell a whole different story—very well done.
You've served up a fine meal of a story with so many delectable dishes--the family togetherness, the mother who loves and worries, the father who loves and shows it, the repentant child, and the meal that awaits them all. I love this story. Your message is clear.
08/17/08
As another commenter has mentioned, those last two lines really make the story. Great job!
Awwww. What a lovely, lovely story that surprises the reader with a deeper meaning at the end. Very nice job.
08/17/08
Great story telling and max points for the ending. Great job. God bless.
08/20/08
"Ripped up the book"= disobeyed the law/ scripture. That was subtle and even better done than the last two lines.