The Official Writing Challenge
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08/15/08
Oooh! What a chilling twist at the end, I thought this was going to be a simple, picnic or park day and instead, wow. good job. ^_^
08/15/08
Lots of interesting twists in here, but some things leave me confused, like the uncomfortable touch from the doctor and the inability to look in his eyes made me wonder, momentarily, if he was harrassing her in some way. I would like to know what happened to Emily. "Jesus of the seekers," --wonderful phrase!!