The Official Writing Challenge
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You left me aching for the father and hoping he would find his daughter. Your last sentence holds a powerful punch.
08/14/08
It was easy to stay interested in this story all the way through. Very realistic, convincing characters and dialogue. I would love to see the bigger picture theme (the parallel to our Heavenly Father) emphasized just a touch more to make the ending even more powerful than it already is.
Thanks for a great read!