The Official Writing Challenge
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08/07/08
Very interesting. It begs for more detail about these two characters. Kept me right to the end.
08/08/08
So engaging. I hope this is the start of a longer work. So many questions that I'd LOVE to have answered in the expanded version. Great characterization, and what a fun little "game."
Oh this begs for more, more, more! I love what you've done with it, unhurried, an underlying hesitancy, all kinds of questions going through their heads... I hope you can find a way to tell us more in another entry! :-) This one is great!
08/12/08
I, too, would love to read more of this. I absolutely loved it! Very sweet and peaceful... yet a hint of an adventure to come.

I would have loved to have more details and descriptions of them and their surroundings but that might just be personal preference.
08/14/08
These characters really engaged me, and I LOVED your ending.
08/14/08
A very pleasant read.