The Official Writing Challenge
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08/07/08
It sounds like this is a true story. If it is, it is amazing (the dream, the friend trying to take his life, then a year later. I really liked your ending with the bungee cord. You've written/told this story in a way that really kept my interest. Nice work on this.
08/08/08
You used a very lively voice to narrate this story. Excellent twist at the end. Well done.
08/11/08
Great title, entertaining, minstered your point well and presented an entry that easily could be turned into a longer piece. Great work. God bless.
08/11/08
Two great twists in this. I like the ending even though it frustrates me a little because I don't know if he throws up his hands because he does or doesn't realize that the guy's bungee jumping. But that last visual is powerful.
08/11/08
Oh wow... you pulled me in and had me hanging on every word. The ending was great. What a fun twist.
You held my interest right down to the last word!! What a great piece and you told it with such skill. Kudos! Big time!
Great job with this, Tim. You drew me in and I held my breath as I waited to see if Tom was going to jump. I'm so glad that he didn't and that there was a happy ending to this. The bungee jumping at the end was a nice touch.
08/13/08
What more can I say, I concur with the comments already here. Great job of story telling.
This was amazing and well-written. You are indeed a wonderful writer. Pulling your reader in well.
Great story Tim. I love the conversational style. I never even thought that it might be Tom trying to jump. You pulled me in with this one and held me to the end.
08/13/08
Tim, you can chalk another one up on the good side. You write with an amazing clarity. I really enjoy reading your entries. Well done.
Like all the other comments before mine, this is highly entertaining and well-written. Really nice work with the characters. :)

08/13/08
God is in the business of miracles, isn't He? Love the way you made this serious and light all in the same story. Kind of like real life. Great piece!