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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Concentration (07/24/08)

TITLE: The Answer to Everything
By Loren T. Lowery
07/30/08


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The story is told that the King of Light had vanquished all of darkness out of his kingdom. To do this, he wrote an eight word proclamation and had his scribes post it on the gates of his city. The edict, written in red letters, stated: I shall take care of all your needs. and it was signed, Your Good and Faithful King..

Next, he had his court magician load a large chest upon a cart and go through out his realm to collect one thing from each household.

“What is it the King wishes for his chest?” each asked the magicians when they knocked on their doors.

“Your fears,” was their steadfast reply.

Soon the chest was overflowing with each of the inhabitant’s dreads: poverty, sickness, guilt and shame. And as the magicians returned to the King’s castle, the villagers hid their faces from the stench and horror brimming from the chest.

“What shall we do with this?” the magicians asked when the cart was pulled before the King.

“Take it below, to the kitchens so that the cooks might boil it down to be distilled and poured into a bottle that I will have my Son toss into the deepest ocean.”

It was done as the King commanded and all of the fears of his people were boiled to a concentrate and poured into a crystal flask the size of a mustard seed, yet weighing the heaviness of a thousand earths.

The King then asked his Son to take the flask upon the deepest ocean and toss it asunder, beyond the distant horizon.

“But he should be lost,” one of the magicians cried in alarm. “The oceans are treacherous and our vessels are weak, unable to withstand such beatings, nor the weight of the vial. The black heaviness from the hearts of your subjects is distilled into even greater heaviness; a weight neither man, nor ship can bear.”

The Son heard the magician and answered. “Friend, did you not also throw your own fears into the chest?”

“I forgot, Sire. I was busy collecting others; as were my fellow magicians.”

“Then do so now with your fellows. Surrender your hearts that your fears may also be distilled and added to the concentrate of the vial. We can have no fears left in my Father’s kingdom. And I shall do as my Father bids, willingly.”

But the magician, called Deceit, would not believe, nor obey. “Such foolishness,” he muttered to the others like himself. “The King’s Son will be lost on the breaking waves and the concentrate be washed back upon the shores.”

Soon, the King heard the magician’s muttering and banished him and his fellow legions from his kingdom. “There is no place here for the darkness hidden in your hearts. Your disobedience is a shadow over the promise I have made to my good people. My words cannot return to me void, be gone and condemned to live without hope.”

And so, Deceit left with his minions. And, standing on a dark hill outside the kingdom, they saw the King’s son at the helm of a wooden craft carrying the crystal flask across the ocean.

And then a storm ensued and mighty waves pounded the ship; and within moments, just beyond the horizon, they saw the ship flounder and sink to the bottom of the sea.

“I was right,” Deceit smirked to his fellows. “Look even the lights of the city have died. The kingdom is in utter darkness. And there is no sound, not even a wail.”

“Such fools,” agreed Pride, lifting his nose as if sniffing a foul odor. “So much for the promise of the Good and Faithful King.”

Then, Folly came and grasped their hands to dance upon their hill.

Yet, on the morning of the third day after the loss of the King’s Son, a great light arose from within the city and with it, glorious voices singing, “Alleluia, alleluia, alleluia.”

“How is this?” Pride asked Deceit.

“I did overhear the King telling his Son that such a thing was possible,” answered Folly. “By replacing empty hearts with another concentrate, far purer than what they surrendered, such light is possible.”

They turned their heads skeptically. “Ah, really and what concentrate might that be?”

“Love, Folly answered. “The King said it was the answer to everything. How silly can someone be?”

And so they stood: hopeless. Observing the light beyond the walls and pondering a question their hardened hearts could never answer.


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Yvonne Blake 08/01/08
Very creative! I like allegories. This one has such a beautiful ending!
I like how the King took away all the fears and replaced them with love.
Thank you for writing this.
Holly Westefeld08/05/08
Perfect love casts out fear. This is a beautiful and creative allegory.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/06/08
I thoroughly enjoyed your beautiful allegory. The personifications were particularly effective.
Betty Castleberry08/06/08
Over the top creative. I love allegories, and this one is very well done. Two thumbs up.
Shirley McClay 08/06/08
Amazing allegory... so creative! Well done.
Joy Faire Stewart08/06/08
The words are descriptive and the message so beautiful, it could be a poem. Loved it!
Sharlyn Guthrie08/06/08
Wow! Very well done. A good allegory is hard to beat, and this one is great! I especially like the part where the magician questions and then is reminded to put his own fears in the jar.
Karen Wilber 08/06/08
I liked this. Lots of good bits--the stench coming from the chest, the magician forgetting to include his own fears, the characteristics of Pride and Folly portrayed in the sniffing and dancing, creative use of "concentrate". My only tiny inky thing would be that you went from 1 magician to several in the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs.

You should definitely do another allegory, parable, fable, etc. sometime. Good stuff.
Patricia Turner08/07/08
I wondered how "magicians" figured into this kingdom. You developed this wonderful story so well. A great job! Congratulations on your most deserving EC first place!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/07/08
Woohoo! I'm so happy to see you in the top spot, very deservedly!
Pamela Kliewer08/07/08
A well deserved EC first! Congratulations.
Chely Roach08/07/08
This was brilliant. I am in awe of this piece...it is perfect.
Carole Robishaw 08/07/08
This was positively worth the EC. Very good job! Congrats!
Debbie Roome 08/07/08
Excellent. So simple but powerful. Well done.
Laurie Walker08/07/08
Wow. Loren, you have such a gift. What a beautiful portrayal. You have such a remarkable and God given gift. Thank you for sharing that gift with us.
william price08/07/08
Excellent job, Loren. I really enjoy your writing. Congrats on Top Spot. God Bless.
Beth LaBuff 08/07/08
Excellent story! Congrats on your EC!
elsie flynn08/07/08
excellent!!!
Jason Swiney08/08/08
I agree with all the wonderful comments above. An excellent allegory - And simply stated: Either a person is inside the walls of the King's city or looking in from the outside, there's no middle ground. I hope this reaches and teaches many people. Congrats on the EC.
Charla Diehl 08/08/08
What an amazing story filled with creativity, wonderfully decriptive sentences and jam packed with imagination. Of course a winner! Congrats to you and will look for your challenge next week. Thanks.
Myrna Noyes08/11/08
Loren, Loren...! This is so creative, thoughtful, powerful, truthful--EXCELLENT! I knew it was a winner from the first paragraph! :) CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Pam Carlson-Hetland08/12/08
Loren, Absolutely loved this. Congrats on the #1 in EC.