The Official Writing Challenge
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I always love reading your stories involving Togullen. Having him say to Iloku that what is past doesn't matter, it is the future he must concentrate on reminds me of Paul when he said in Philippians "forgetting what lies behind and reaching forward to what lies ahead." This is well written and flows smoothly.
08/03/08
Good story. Some of the names were hard to pronounce. On the whole there were good descriptions and action. I could see the pitcher sliding down the blade so he could take a drink. Well done.