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07/31/08
I've watched people isolate in their grief, and you have captured it tenderly in this story.
The only observation I have, and it is quite minor, is that if you had found some way to unobtrusively mention the school pictures earlier in the story, I would not have been left thinking, "I wonder where those came from?"
I could really feel Emma's loneliness, as well as her husband's mortification when he finally realized what he had done.
08/03/08
A very good picture of what grief can do. I'm glad the husband finally sees what he is doing, and decides to move forward. Nicely done. Thank you.