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07/24/08
The voice in this piece is perfectly quaint and old-fashioned. Great descriptions, and such a curious event makes a wonderful anecdote. Love it!
07/24/08
Really good—God can work in mysterious ways, can't He.
You've created wonderful atmosphere with this piece. Fun from beginning to end.
07/26/08
This piece has incredible, wonderful atmosphere, and delightful characterization and sense of place. Loved this one.
Wonderful! Loved the voice and the whole tone of the piece. And I do believe in miracles. Well done.
07/30/08
What a delightful read!
07/30/08
What an awesome story... I could see this being developed into a book. LOVE the miracle.
This is a favorite, for sure. What wonderful lines: for example, the description of the phone as "hallowed by hollow and politely unproductive" and
"Folks read the news while it was still fresh."
07/30/08
This gives new depth and definition to the word "miracle." What a great story and well told. Kudos!
I love this! What a wonderful piece of writing. I really like this phrase: considering the lustrous, wooden device mounted in the hallway, hallowed but hollow, and politely unproductive. You gave this piece a nice touch of humor, as well.
07/30/08
Oooh, love the voice of this. I had a feeling that Aunt Sophie's call would be terribly important, but I didn't get the end until the very end, that the phone wasn't really connected! Amazing! I liked this and only noticed one typo, I think, "understood" should've been "understand"? Nice job! ^_^
07/30/08
I love an old-fashioned story like this. And what a way to bring in the use of a useless phone. You did a great job, leaving the reader with a bit of a mystery, yet alleviating the suspense of the situation..Good story telling...Helen
I enjoyed the smooth writing style and the minute details. Perfect last sentence.
That definitely was a miracle from God that made that phone work!

What more do I need to say about this? It came from Ann, so it's guaranteed that it's going to be good writing (and even better reading). :)