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07/24/08
Great piece of writing. I like how you showed the differences in the times. Novel idea:)
07/25/08
Good story with an important message. I actually enjoyed the extract from the "novel" as it's own story. Maybe you could write one about those characters one day!
07/27/08
Before telephones, news was old before others heard about it. The novel element was a nice touch. Good job. Thank you.
07/28/08
What a charming story! I enjoyed both - the past and present. I nearly went with the new-fangled invention too! Thanks for sharing - it was a fun read.
Very creative and I loved the story within the story. Excellent message, too.
This is well written and entertaining. I like the story within a story. Nicely done.
Really good personal narrative. You had a smooth transition from the MC's present to the past in the book. Really liked the use of the journal to summarize the insight the MC received. Very nice. :)
07/30/08
I like the way you constructed this. It was such a delightful read,especially for someone like me! Big time kudos!
07/30/08
VERY good! The novel excerpt in the middle is awesome, the writing tight and engrossing. I love the journal entry that ends the story. It really blessed me today and I needed that prayer! (for different reasons from your MC, but that's how God works, huh?)
"Two stories for the price of one here." Your writing is excellent. I could see the characters through their conversations, and you tied the novel to the present just right.
07/30/08
Very creative! I can definitely relate to this and I liked the real life touches inside of this. It's up to date with things that we're dealing with now (gas prices, airfare, etc.) and yet going back to a novel for the very first day of the telephone. Loved it! ^_^
The mixing of the novel with the main story was a nice touch. I think it's what really gives this piece its flair. I'm guessing that it is based off a recent real life experience as well. Thank you for sharing. I always enjoy your stuff, Shirley.
07/31/08
I loved the bittersweetness of this. Great piece of writing!