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You kept me hanging on right to the end to find out where the telephone came in. Excellent ending.
The atmosphere of this piece is palpable, masterful! Excellent descriptions, and an incredible twist. Absolutely top-notch piece.
Wow! I love this. I felt like I was at the diner. Your creative descritpions were masterful. I love the twist at the end. I'm ready for chapter two!
Engaging story! I guessed at the ending and wasn't dissapointed. Would love to read the full story. Let us know if you write a novel. ;-)
Very enjoyable. Excellent mis-direction.
I like the way the regulars interact in your story. Nice job on telling one of the stories behind the faces at the cafe.
Completely hooked, didn't see it coming. I felt as inquisitive as your MC while reading this. Love the "road" imagery. Excellent.
I was drawn into the scene by the first paragraph. Loved the minute details and the unexpected ending. Excellent!
Sharlyn, this had me completely engaged the whole read and I really liked the unforseen twist at the end. Everyone and the events all seemed so real. Wonderfully done! Loren
Delightful story. Has a "homely" feel about. Once I warmed up to grasp the background descriptions (sorry, it's just me - I never notice my surroundings like my wife does!) I could really feel I was in the cafe, watching the romance unfold.
But still it seemed too good to be true, so that twist at the end had just the right impact. Well done.