The Official Writing Challenge
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I was pulled into your story from the very beginning and loved how Ben was used as the instument to bring the mc back to the Lord. I like how you left the ending open for the reader to finish it.
A good story of God-timing.
07/30/08
Ohhh, kinda sad, but good! I did like it. I loved the details of the summery 'love' and the pink, sparkly phone. What girl can't relate to that? lol. You had some good emotions and atmosphere, my only note is the maybe the last line wasn't really necessary, it seemed pretty well as it was at the end. Otherwise, good job, I did like it! ^_^
Loved the story. I was hoping that her and Ben would reunite, and in a way, they did. Good job with this!
08/07/08
Bravo! This was an extremely engaging piece.