The Official Writing Challenge
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I couldn't imagine being in a situation like this - but now, thanks to your extremely vivid, poignant writing, I can. Excellent and heartwrenching.
This was written so well that I was sitting right there with there with the mc, waiting for the ring of the phone.
Well told! You kept us in suspense. Great job of keeping the identity of the names obscure by using "Doe". I liked that: Jane Doe, John Doe, Mama Doe. Very cleaver. I am glad in actuality that the unit had moved on and that all were safe...Helen
Great job of reminding us what military families go through. Well written, too. Kudos.
Oh, I was so scared for poor "Mrs Doe"! Thanks for the foot note - before I read it I was sure the phone call was going to be bad news. Truly enjoyed reading this - good writing!!
Wow! I'm so glad this had a happy ending. Too often, it doesn't. I can't imagine the anxiety our military families feel all the time. Thanks for sharing.
OH. MY. GOODNESS. I didn't just sit on the edge of my seat; I fell off! What a great entry. Big time kudos!
Oh my! This was so incredibly real! You did well with the details and the atmosphere, I liked the name of "Doe" that added a kind of twist to the story. I also liked the notes at the end, wow. Good job! ^_^
This is a great emotion packed piece and very well written. I'm glad that in the end all turned out well.
What suspense and tension you built up with this story! I was biting my lip in anticipation of what was going to happen. I'm glad that you had the explanation at the end, otherwise I would have still been wondering what had happened. Great job!