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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Telephone (07/17/08)

TITLE: Marvin Malone, Please Get Off the Phone
By Karen Wilber
07/20/08


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Marvin Malone please get off the phone.
Put his cell to his ear when he heard a ringtone.
To get his attention, you’ll need a cyclone.
Hang it up, Marvin Malone.

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Cooed the belle of the ball wearing eau de cologne,
“Waltz with me now or you’ll tango alone.
Pretty please, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Said a long-armed musician with bright brass trombone,
“Concert chatter the orchestra cannot condone.
Be quiet, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Commanded the queen from her emerald throne,
“Come join me for tea with some jam on a scone.
Be my guest, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
The doctor prescribed in an ominous tone,
“You might fall and break your occipital bone.
Be careful, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Said his grandmother living in Boca Raton,
“And I’ll buy you a triple mint fudge ice cream cone
With two scoops, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Growled polar bears deep in the cold arctic zone,
“This iceberg is ours; go get one of your own.
Go away, Marvin Malone.”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone.”
Hollered hard-hatted Hank with an orange warning cone,
“You’ve driven right into a construction zone.
Look out, Marvin Malone!”

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
They said from San Juan to Sierra Leone
In Munich, Madrid, in Berlin and Bayonne,
“That’s enough, Marvin Malone.”

Marvin Malone, please get off the phone.
See that hungry lion picking his teeth with a bone?
You’ll be his next meal, standing still as a stone.
Run away, Marvin Malone!

Marvin Malone, please get off the phone.
You’ve been on it so long that your children are grown.
Has anyone seen him? His fate is unknown.
Poor Marvin Malone.


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Sharlyn Guthrie07/24/08
Fun, fun, fun! children will love this. One suggestion: I think the entire first stanza should be directed to Marvin Malone instead of telling about him in the middle. I love the variation of themes from construction zone to the north pole, etc.
Lynda Schultz 07/24/08
Insidious little devils those cell phones, aren't they? Very good.
Joanne Sher 07/24/08
An absolute DELIGHT and joy to read. This must have been tons of fun to write too. The rhymed are absolutely a hoot and totally delightful and fun. Love it!
Laury Hubrich 07/25/08
How funny. My kids would say that's me while on the internet. What a fun piece!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/28/08
Your creativity and humor are displayed delightfully here. I loved it.
Glynis Becker 07/29/08
Such a fun read! I love the rhythm...great job!
Chely Roach07/30/08
This was an absolute blast to read. Great job!
Joshua Janoski07/31/08
This was fun! It had a Dr. Seuss feel to it. My favorite stanza was this one:

“Marvin Malone, please get off the phone,”
Growled polar bears deep in the cold arctic zone,
“This iceberg is ours; go get one of your own.
Go away, Marvin Malone.”


Poor Marvin. Why don't they leave him alone when he talks on the phone? Hehe :)
Beth LaBuff 07/31/08
Wow! I love this... your rhyming words are excellent (and it was no small feat to get so many words to rhyme with phone). I bet your kids will love to hear this read! (and I wish I could hear about their reaction to this). :)
David Butler 07/31/08
I must be a kid at heart, coz this really appealed to me at 58. Takes a lot of skill to write something that appeals to any age -- AND put it to rhyme. I can visualize some great illustrations to go with it. Well done!