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This brought huge tears to my eyes, and gave me goosebumps. (I really needed to read this right now as I wallow in my self-pity.) I'm usually not a fan of free-verse--I often don't "get it"--but this is incredible. Excellent job with the topic.
Well written. It's hard for me to comprehend that so many children lives lives of such desperation.
This is powerful, rich, deep. I've had students like this, although by the time they reach me, the damage is almost always irreparable.

Excellent job with the voice of the grandmother, and of the teacher. Heartbreaking and excellently written.
Your very well written story brings back such memories of moments when my strictness as a teacher was suddenly modified by a wake-up call of understanding.
From a teacher: simply outstanding, and sadly, very realistic and true for too many. Very well done.
Great take on the topic and what a true, but sad, message. It is sad that educators nationwide can relate to this (I am in Education too). School is too often the only safe haven for a child. If we knew what all the students in our classrooms endured, we probably couldn't teach, we'd just counsel them, hug them, and beat up the bad people for them. This obviously struck a nerve, good writing!
Oooh wow - very powerful. I ache for children like this, and praise the Lord for teachers who have compassion. Very moving.
Oh, heartbreaking. I know I had students in my classrooms like this...sometimes, it hurts too much to know what is happening to them at home. That ol' Satan...such a liar and soul-stealer. Thank the Good Lord that He offers a way out-even for the students like this one. Powerful voice and message.
Got so caught up in the message that I forgot to comment on your writing; masterful and awesome-written with the creative power of the Holy Spirit in your hand.
Heartbreaking and realistic. A few former students came to mind as I read this poem. Well-written.
That was awesome! Your choice of words, the whole sorry narrative. Brilliant writing.
Absolutely incredible...awesome.
This is just plain good. You subtly sucked me into this heartbreaking tale - and by the end made me feel maybe a bit of what this teacher must face each day. Excellent.
I read this earlier but was so struck by it that I didn't know what to say, so I sent a link to all the teachers in my email address book.

This really touched me. Thanks for writing it.
It's hard to believe that so many children live lives of such misery. So well written.

Whoa, this is powerful stuff. You did a great job.
Oh if there were only more people with empathy like this teacher, what a far better world this would be.
Wonderfully written, handled masterfully by an author with a poet's heart
Perfect rhythm and what a telling story. Fabulous job!
There aren't enough superlatives to comment on this piece. It truly is remarkable! Wow!