The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/08
I like the format you used--with the grandmother telling the story of her memories of her grandmother.

The only thing I questioned was the age of young Abigail. Her thought process seemed a little older than six--and I wasn't sure that she would stop and listen outside the door upon hearing her name. (But I haven't had a six-yr-old in a long time.)

Nice job with the topic, and I especially like the way the dancing theme ran throughout.
07/20/08
This was lovely and tender...well done.
07/21/08
Nicely done. Sweet picture of grandmotherly memories.
I liked the transition from one grandmother to the next. I thought that you did a good job with this. Even though you didn't use all 750 words, the story and the ending still felt satisfying. Thank you for sharing this.
07/30/08
Great story. I loved the way you led up to the climax, but carefully left it to the very end...Good strategy...Great storytelling. It's hard to tell a whole story in 750 words, isn't it?...Helen