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Watered entered my eyes when I read, “Look who I’ve brought with me today, Mum. It’s Sally. My eldest. Your grand-daughter.” I had to forcibly keep the water from flowing when I read, “I stare at the girl. She’s me. Why has she got my face?”

The line “I know my redeemer lives.’ More words that just pop out.” is such a powerful testimony in one line. I’ve seen it many times where someone who “has lost their mind” talks of the Lord and remembers verses.

This story was excellent.

It's sad when a family member forgets who you are. I like the line, "I know my redeemer lives." She remembers what's important. Very well done.
This was supremely bittersweet. Such a sad but common event, however you gave us hope with her lingering memories of God and His word. Very well done!
Sad! So sad! Yet so true. I have seen poor souls like that, when I worked in ECU. Oh, that old age has to do that to a person...Well told...Helen
WOW! Thank you for the warning that it was a sad one. Thank you for sharing this sad, but beautiful story with us.
I loved this entry. Telling this story from the victim's POV was masterful. It was funny and smart and sad all at the same time. I particularly loved Enid's impression of the nurse with the short skirt and the daughter who had stolen her face. You got 5s across the board from me.
Stephen, an amazing story. I'm always quite impressed when a man writes convincingly from a woman's POV. The stream-of-consciousness is very effective here, and the sadness of her mental deterioration is punctuated with lovely moements of grace. A well-deserved Top 40 placement!