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Watered entered my eyes when I read, Look who Ive brought with me today, Mum. Its Sally. My eldest. Your grand-daughter. I had to forcibly keep the water from flowing when I read, I stare at the girl. Shes me. Why has she got my face?

The line I know my redeemer lives. More words that just pop out. is such a powerful testimony in one line. Ive seen it many times where someone who has lost their mind talks of the Lord and remembers verses.

This story was excellent.

07/17/08
It's sad when a family member forgets who you are. I like the line, "I know my redeemer lives." She remembers what's important. Very well done.
07/20/08
This was supremely bittersweet. Such a sad but common event, however you gave us hope with her lingering memories of God and His word. Very well done!
07/21/08
Sad! So sad! Yet so true. I have seen poor souls like that, when I worked in ECU. Oh, that old age has to do that to a person...Well told...Helen
07/23/08
WOW! Thank you for the warning that it was a sad one. Thank you for sharing this sad, but beautiful story with us.
I loved this entry. Telling this story from the victim's POV was masterful. It was funny and smart and sad all at the same time. I particularly loved Enid's impression of the nurse with the short skirt and the daughter who had stolen her face. You got 5s across the board from me.
07/26/08
Stephen, an amazing story. I'm always quite impressed when a man writes convincingly from a woman's POV. The stream-of-consciousness is very effective here, and the sadness of her mental deterioration is punctuated with lovely moements of grace. A well-deserved Top 40 placement!