The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/08
Good for Michelle—and I love that she paid Mark back in pennies! Well done.
07/17/08
Good story! I'm glad for her that she kept up her resolve until the right man and the right time.
07/17/08
Good for her. Instead of her wedding night being tainted by bitter guilt, she has a pure night to look forward to. I found the transition of her mood before and after the flash-back to be just a little on the abrupt side, but otherwise great story.
07/18/08
I enjoyed your story. The contrast with anticipation for what was on the other side of the door was especially good. The pennies added just the right touch.
07/19/08
Contrast between the two scenes on either side of the door were very good. I agree that the transition was a bit sudden, but this was thought-provoking and engaging.
07/21/08
Good story. I am glad that she didn't give in but walked away from the motel. You made me care about her and her decision!
07/24/08
Laura, I love how you unveil the lies of the world in this beautiful story. May this story encourage young people to choose the blessing of purity.
07/26/08
What an EXCELLENT portrayal of the dark side of the expectations of Prom Night; She stood her ground for the Lord and God blessed her...with pennies from heaven.