The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a very good job with this sad, sweet story. It was very visual. I liked the way the daughter touched her mother's wrist.
Beautifully written. You had me close to tears because, you see, I'm almost as old as the alzheimer's patient. By God's grace, my memory is good and I'm physically active. Bless you for writing this.
07/21/08
Very realistic, attentive,and sensitive detail. What a Godly love for her job and other elderly mothers your MC reveals--without overdoing it--in the end. Nice work!
07/25/08
This was a beautiful, poignant story. Wonderful imagery, and well placed details, like the MC being fond of the coolness of the cotton on her bare neck. Even being so sad, it was a lovely read. Well done.