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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Family Reunion (06/05/08)

TITLE: Kinfolk, Kinfolk, Shall She Dread
By Janice Cartwright
06/11/08


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Whenever family members come
Shall she to all her fears succumb?
Like fret Sis spot her hennaed hair-
And blab it out for all to share

Dare she to stoke the fires of dread
That Maeve will think her over fed?
Or worry Uncle Jed her sin
Will air- and Aunty taunt again?

Or sweat her quisling belt might pop
And squishy flab squirt out the top?
Or thought forbid her hose might run,
And pesky clansmen poke some fun

Should old attire and rusty car
Give rise to doubts she's up to par?
Or make her want to stay at home
And fritter time away alone?

Among the fair and slim and sleek
Will plump and frumpy even speak?
Or will she tremble at their stare?
Or lose her sleep? Pull her hair?

Will she consent such quaky qualms
To crease her brow? Wet her palms?
Allow her wretched worry wart
To scrap convention's applecart?

In short, shall she permit her fear
To steal her joy in family cheer
And yank away her blessing sweet
With gathered folk this day to meet?

Or dare she put her dread to rest?
Dare thank her God she’s truly blessed"
To greet such kith and kin- her own
Whenever family members come?


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Amy Michelle Wiley 06/13/08
It took me a a couple stanzas before I was quite following, but then I caught on and enjoyed the read. Oh, how easy it is to worry about what others are thinking of us.
Beth LaBuff 06/14/08
Wow! This is excellent from the title to the end. Great words, rhyme, meter, and pictures. I love it!
Ed VanDeMark06/14/08
Fun read, with a great message. Well done. Thank you. Loved your humor.
LauraLee Shaw06/15/08
Perfect for the topic, smooth flow, and complex rhyming. Masterfully written.
David Butler 06/19/08
The title caught my attention. I thought: "Aha! A natural poet." Congratulations on such highly polished poetry. It appears to flow so effortlessly from your pen/keyboard, but I bet it took a bit of work to get it as good as this, sticking to the disciplines of consistent meter and rhyme. The underlying agonies of creating a good impression for our relatives, we can all relate to and complain about in our writing. Expressing it so skillfully and humorously in verse makes it a masterpiece.
I also have a preference for traditional styles myself, but I can appreciate others -- as long as it's consistent. You certainly showed that, although I might have avoided the slanting rhyme on the last line.
Sorry this is a bit wordy. I felt it was worth more than just a "Bravo!"