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06/13/08
Wow...I LOVED this. Awesome take on the subject, and SO well written. Wow.
06/13/08
This is absolutely beautiful and tender, with captivating descriptions. Atmospheric and so visual. Wow.
06/14/08
Love your two characters in this unusual family. I hope they're going to be OK from now on.
What a tender story this is.
This is so good and I hope so much it places! Kudos!
06/18/08
Much like your previous entry, this is like a kid's story for grown-ups. I love the depth, hidden under a simple-sounding narrative. Great descriptive work makes it come alive. I truly like this new direction you've taken - so original and SO well written. And the title is awesome, too. :)
Loren, this was wonderful! I loved every single word. I would love to see this illustrated in a children's book. Just perfect my friend, just perfect.
06/19/08
How unique this is. You've written this heart-warming, yet unusual story in a manner that held my interest.
I loved everything about this tender story. The descriptions are very visual plus a beautiful message. Excellent, I hope this places!
Congratulations Loren on placing 11th In your level and 18th overall. Loved that story so much.
06/21/08
Thanks you masters for your expertise and encouragement that we writers experience from you, right from starting out as beginners.