The Official Writing Challenge
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06/13/08
Full of emotion and depth - and that last line is wonderful. Vivid descriptions really make this piece.
06/14/08
I have the feeling there was more to this story (the persecutions, why he was injured). I found myself wanting to know more about these two men. You really peaked my curiosity with this story.
I love the opening sentence. This was well written, and had a good message, too.
06/21/08
Thanks you masters for your expertise and encouragement that we writers experience from you, right from starting out as beginners.