The Official Writing Challenge
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06/13/05
Methink Crazy Ray isn't quite so crazy. Nicely done.
06/14/05
This is an enjoyable story filled with true perspectives of parents and teens. Sometimes it takes an objective "crazy" outsider to show the way.
Thank you!
06/14/05
Nice way to have an impartial ear for her to realize that her dad was just worried, especially after losing a son. This has potential to be expanded into a longer piece.
06/15/05
A fun read, thanks.
06/15/05
Enjoyed the characters. Nice read.
Strong characters and dialogue. I like the touches of atmosphere used to enhance the piece but not weigh it down. Great job!
06/16/05
You painted a vivid picture of Crazy Ray and Karen. Nicely written piece with strands of hope dispersed near the end. Enjoyed the descriptive writing in this story. :)
06/16/05
Strong story once again. Pulled me in and held my attention to the end. Wonderful "in the box" writing. See? You do have it in you... LOL
Blessings, Lynda
06/16/05
I wish Crazy Joe was a neighbor of mine! Sounds like he cooks reaaal goood and invites the neighbors! You created a believable ambience - well done!
06/17/05
Believable characters, story and great sense of place. Just a leeeetle confused with this sentence:
Her friends had probably gone to the skate park without her, she knew. A enjoyable read.
06/17/05
Nice Paradox;Crazy Ray bringing sanity to the house.Did God not say He will use the foolish things to confound the wise? Great story and very well written.
I liked it (even if it wasn't very dusty). LOL Great job!
06/20/05
Now I get your hint! (Hindsight is 20/20) Well done, as always. Although you say it is 'in the box', it is one of the only entries where the father doesn't actually appear at all (and hasn't already passed on) yet is very much a key part of the piece. Great work.
This was one of my favorite pieces of the week. Awesome work as always! I love your characters and you delivered a great message.
06/20/05
Kyle, this is one of your best pieces. I really liked the development of the characters here, especially the neighbor. Really nice work.