The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Cute little poem, with a really effective use of repetition and a simple meter.

I don't get the title, or the stanza in the middle with the funeral director...and I caught a few inconsistencies in meter and rhyme scheme.

But I love the way you paint a picture of a relaxed and imperfect family home--just the kind I've loved for 33 years!
06/09/08
I wonder if a person is allowed to say she doesn't quite understand the poem...After reading the comments of others, which I don't usually do before I add mine, I caught on that you were saying that although your house may not be too tidy, at least your kids were happy. And that is what counts....At least, I have to say, your poem is unique...Helen
06/09/08
LOL! This was funny to read, I liked the opening verse with the underwear-heehee, that was just a truly realistic touch! nice job! ^_^