The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Well-written and cinematic in feel. I liked it.
06/06/08
Beautiful, vivid descriptions in this piece.
06/08/08
I loved your opening paragraph… it sounds like where we live. Your character names seem very real to the period and I love that you gave your MC's full name. This thought is perfect, "home at this age means only two things: Momma and Papa". After reading this I appreciate your title more. I loved this peek into history. As usual, your writing is excellent!
Wonderfully written, I love the detail and descriptive words. The tale is woven and well told and the point is well made. Great job!
~Ree~
06/09/08
Fantasic descriptions and imagery here! I loved it, felt like I was along for the ride too! ^_^
Your descriptions of Jeddah filled me with a wonderful image of a man, loved and counted on. This was peaceful in spite of the attack.Hope they make it to Oregon so we can read another installment someday.